Dogs of War

Hi to all,

Until we meet
My nights will be a little colder
My days a little shorter
My heart will beat a little less rapid

Until we meet
I know that my arms will be empty
My mind hurting from the constant thought of you
Minutes will seem to be hours
Hours will seem to be months
While months will seem like eternity

Until we meet
The stars in the sky will not affect me
with its gleaming sparkles of life

Until I am gazing at them in your arms
And the food that I eat will not be as fulfilling and nourishing
Until it is you that I share the my food with
And Until we meet
I will not feel whole
My world will seem incomplete
Until that wonderful day
When our eyes make first contact
And our bodies and souls collide in blissful whirlwind
The words will roll off my tongue like a sweet love song
"Hello, my love, I couldn't wait to meet you."

It took me some time to find the rhythm in your poem but once I found it (I think I did) I have to say I like most of it. I don’t really like the first verse because the second phrase doesn’t seem to fit with the first and the third, but I like the rest of the poem.

(especially this one)

(10-06-2009 06:52 AM)adamscarter01 Wrote: [ -> ]Minutes will seem to be hours
Hours will seem to be months
While months will seem like eternity

Just my opinion, so keep on going!
Xi

Hi adam,

I appreciate your poetry.
It's too good. Keep continue this good thing.

Hi man,

I also agree with zenon,

this is good poetry, keep continue.